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This set of slides has feedback on your essays. It looks at structure, particularly topic sentences. It also gives examples of common mistakes with prepositions from your essays.

This set of slides has feedback on your essays. It looks at structure, particularly topic sentences. It also gives examples of common mistakes with prepositions from your essays.

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  • Week 4 – 4 tips for writing smoothly
  • Word choice feedback
  • Fill in the blanks
    North of Tokyo (……..…)
    in northern Tokyo(……..)
    south of Japan (……….)
    in the south of Japan (….)
    Located … the middle of
    The Sumidagawa runs ….. Asakusa.
    Yokohama is … Tokyo Bay
    Chiba has the same climate ( ….) Tokyo.
  • Correcting the sentences
    • It is near the sea,
    • important place for tourism
    • It has the same climate as Japan.
    • Sometimes it snows
    • Hokkaido is the north of Japan.
    • centre of Japanese industry or
    • industrial centre of Japan
    • It is near to the sea 
    • important place of tourism 
    • It has the same climate which Japan has. 
    • Sometimes it is snow. 
    • Hokkaido is the north of Japan. 
    • centre of the Japan’s industry 
  • Structure feedback
  • 1. Topic sentences: A
    Is the first sentence in a paragraph.
    It should connect to the topic –
    eg Industry
    It has rice.
    Rice is an important industry in Yonezawa.
  • Topic sentences - Bshould have a clear subject .
    Not “It”
    It is famous for beef. X
    Yonezawa is famous for beef O
    It has tourism. X
    Tourism is an important industry in Kyoto O
  • 2. Avoid repeating the same words.
    • Kyoto is famous in Japanese history. It has many famous temples. Kinkakuji is particularly famous. Kyoto is also famous for yatsuhashi.
    • Kyoto is an important city in Japanese history. It is famous for temples such as Kinkakuji. Yatsuhasiis a specialty food of Kyoto.
  • 3. Avoid repeating the same sentence pattern.
    Yokohama is the second biggest city in Japan. It is on the Kanto Plain. It is in Kanagawa. It is south of Tokyo.

    Yokohama is the second biggest city in Japan. It is in Kanagawa, just south of Tokyo, on the Kanto Plain.
  • 4. Use paragraph style
    Kyoto is an important city in Japanese history.
    It is famous for temples such as Kinkakuji.
    Yatsuhasi is a specialty food of Kyoto.
    Kyoto is an important city in Japanese history. It is famous for temples such as Kinkakuji. Yatsuhasi is a specialty food of Kyoto.
  • A good paragraph has
    1. A clear topic sentence
    2. Paragraph form.
    A good paragraph avoids
    1. Repeating the same structure.
    2. Repeating the same word.
  • Writing smoothly
    • My home is in Kanagawa,
    • In summer it’s very hot.
    • It has the same climate as Japan.
    • Sometimes it snows
    • Hokkaido is the north of Japan.
    • centre of Japanese industry or
    • industrial centre of Japan
    • My home is Kanagawa. 
    • In summer it’s a lot of hot 
    • It has the same climate to Japan. 
    • Sometimes it is snow. 
    • Hokkaido is the north of Japan. 
    • centre of the Japan’s industry 
  • Marks
    Clear topic sentence - 3
    Detailed information - 5
    Paragraph form – 2
    Grammar- 5
    Each paragraph should be 30 – 50 words long.