Thesis Statements and Introductions Dr. CEnglish 1030-Composition II
The Thesis Statement• Should be as specific as possible• Should be as forceful as possible• Should avoid sounding wishy-washy• Should be clear and concise• Should contain 3 or 4 main points of your paper• Should be the last sentence of your introduction
Example Thesis Statements• Topic: education, research and virtual environments• Thesis Statement: Real education, in disciplines such as medicine, science and astronomy, can take place within virtual environments.
Another Example Thesis Statement• Topic: Social Interaction• Thesis Statement: Social interaction within a virtual world, like partying, listening to live music and even watching movies, can be more enjoyable than one might initially believe.
Yet Another Example Thesis Statement• Topic: Role Playing• Thesis Statement: Role playing is a very popular activity in Second Life, involving choosing a role-play group, selecting a role within that group and looking the part. 5
One More Thesis Statement Example• Topic: Machinima• Thesis Statement: Machinima is an innovative form of film making enabling machinimators to create music videos, public service announcements and even training videos. 6
Thesis Rules• A thesis statement should: – Never be an open-ended question – Be limited to mentioning only those points you plan to discuss in your essay – Never be so broad that it’s difficult to discuss all relevant information – Only present one specific topic/idea – Never contain two conflicting ideas – For this class, focus on Second Life, not a comparison between SL and the real world
Introductions• Must make a good first impression - you only get one chance to grab your reader’s attention• Is part of the road map for the rest of your paper• Will make your reader want to read more
Effective Introductions• Consider your topic carefully• Personalize your introduction...consider telling the reader a story• Draft introductions are ok to begin with• Open with an attention grabber• Be straightforward and confident (Never use statements like: “In this paper…”, or “This paper is about…”.
Less Effective Introductions• Webster’s dictionary introduction• Dawn of man introduction (broad sweeping statements… “since the beginning of time…”• Place holder introduction (not really saying much but filling space) e.g. “I do not really understand the topic but thought I would write about.....”