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  1. 1. PES/ENG/IX/021 Note- File for Beta Evaluation - Pl mark the portion reqd in Punjabi A PUNJAB EDUSAT SOCIETY PRODUCTION SUBJECT - ENGLISH CLASS - IX CHAPTER - ESSAY WRITING III MODULE - PARTS OF AN ESSAY (Word Count-2945) CUT TO ANCHOR: Hello children, We had learnt about the different parts of an essay. Let’s recall what all we had learnt.  An essay consists of three segments – introduction, body and conclusion.  The introduction should be short, attractive and should contain the purpose of the essay.  The body should contain all the points we had made in the outline and should have clarity.  The conclusion should be short, attractive and in the right mood.  Introduction can start with a question, incident or example.  Introduction can also start with a catchy , relevant quotation. CUT TO ANCHOR: ftfdnkoEhU, ;kvh ni d / ftF/ pko / ikD- gSkD pj[s uzrh sokQ j' rJh j? go fJj skA fJe S'Nk fijk yzv ;h.n;b ftZu fBpzX p[fBnkdh s'o s/ nkgD/ YkAu/ s/ fBoGo eodk j? fiE/ n;h ;ko/ B[efsnkA Bz{ fbye/ ftnes eod / jkA .nkgD/ ftukokA Bz{ ;kBz{ bVhtko oyDk ukjhdk j? fit/A s[;h fe;h Bkb rZb eo oj/ j'. In short, the body of an essay can be described as follows: Basic points, Ordered and connected, Delivered clearly and appropriately, in Your own individual style. ( Blink the highlighted capital letters.) 1
  2. 2. PES/ENG/IX/021 As we have seen, the body for descriptive essays is more or less concerned with Text on screen with voice over • Definition, description of the problem / phenomena • Causes • Effects – positive or negative or both • Steps to be taken CUT TO ANCHOR: nkws'o s/ nfij/ ftF/ fiBkQ dk ;zpzX tksktoD ikA ;wkfie w[;hpskA Bkb j't/,T[BkQ dk YkAuk nfijk jz[dk j?.nfij/ ftfFnkaftZu jeheskA ns / T[dkjoDk Bz{ Fkfwb eoBk pj[s wjsZtg{oB ns/ bkGdkfJe jz[dk j?.nypkokA ns/ o;kfbnkA dk jtkbk d/D Bkb ;kvk fpnkB ehsk fBpzX j'o o'ue j' ikAdk j?.ftF/ Bkb ;zpzfXs nkw ikDekoh fbyD ftZu pj[s wdd eodh j?.fijVhnkA rbkA pko/ ;kBz{ brdk j? fe fJj Bjh j't/rk T[; bJh ;kBz{ fJj fbyDk ukjhdk j? fe j' ;edk j? fe fJj Bk th j't / Topics concerning environmental issues, social problems etc. generally have this kind of a body. In such topics, it is of great importance and advantage to include facts and examples supporting your body. Referring to Newspaper and Magazine clippings is an interesting way of enriching your descriptive essay. Having a good general knowledge helps a lot. Since in such topics, we mostly state facts, it is very important to clarify which sentence is your opinion and not a fact. If you feel something will not happen, say ‘It may not happen’, do not say ‘It will not happen’. The sentence then sounds like a fact. Summing up, descriptive essays deal with true life and our own environment, so they can be actually written in a very candid and lively manner. Kushal has completed the body of his essay. Let’s take a look. Text on screen with voice over(A blirred, big, coloured image of a tall tree to be shown in the background of the text.) Trees provide us with fruits and vegetables. They provide us shade in summers. They are the home for many birds. Trees during photosynthesis take in carbon- dioxide and give out oxygen. They help purify the air for us. Trees help in cooling the surroundings and in attracting rains. When we cut down trees, we not only make the land barren, but the atmosphere polluted and hotter too. If trees are indeed so helpful, why do people want to cut them? Certainly for their own business. They build hotels, markets, malls etc. in places where trees have been standing for years. They build houses and use the wood from the trees to furnish them. They feel they are gaining a lot by cutting the trees while actually they are at a loss. When we cut trees, it is nobody’s but our own loss. The ecological balance gets affected. Food for the animals and humans reduces, pollution becomes dominant, rains become less frequent and weather becomes hot and dry. The Hotels can be built elsewhere , without cutting the trees. It is easy to cut them in a day but growing one so easily is just not possible! 2
  3. 3. PES/ENG/IX/021 For all the good that trees do to us, we can at least show a little humanity by not plucking and crumpling plants unnecessarily. We should spread the awareness among more people. We have seen people coming and heartlessly cutting down the trees we had fondly grown in our neighbourhood. The owner of the hotel will be enjoying his profits. But we will get hurt by the polluted air and increase in the atmospheric temperature. We, who live in this neighbourhood, should protect our valuable trees, our surroundings Maintaining our environmental balance is very much in our own hands. CUT TO ANCHOR: fJ;d/ fBpzX d/ YkAu/ B/ ;ko/ B[efsnkA Bz{ ;zy/g ftZu pVh u[;sh Bkb Fkfwb ehsk j?.fJj th fJe toDkswe fBpzX j? fJ;bJh T[;Bz{ ekoDk,gqGktkA ns/ T[; bJh u[e/ ikD tkb/ edwkA,tkb/ Bw{B/ Bz{ Fkfwb eoBk gt/rk .go eh j't /rk id'A ;kv/ e'b'A fe;/ ftF/ s / ;[Mkn wzr/ ikD< T[dkjoD d / s'o s /,eh N?bhthiB d/yDk ;kv/ bJh jkBhekoe j?< In such topics we have three options: Text on screen with voice over We can i. Agree with the topic ii. Disagree with the topic iii. Take a neutral stand, neither agree nor disagree CUT TO ANCHOR: ;kvk fBpzX fJj efj ;edk j? fe N?bhthiB d/yDk jkBhekoe j?. n;h fJ; ftZu jkBhnkA d/ ekoD ,gqGkt ns/ T[gkn pko/ dZ; ;ed/ jkA .i/eo ;kvk fBpzX fJ; s'A ;fjws Bk j't/ skA n;h T[;d/ bkGkA pko/ fby ;ed/ jkA.fJ;d/ pkti{d i/ n;hA d'jkA pko/ fbyDk ukjz[d/ jkA skA n;hA bkG ns/ jkBhnkA d'jkA pko/ fby ;ed/ jkA ..But, in some cases, we cannot take a neutral stand because the two stands are two extremes and do not go together. Sometimes the topic of the essay itself rules out the possibility of a neutral stand. For example: ‘Is today’s generation smarter than the previous?’ When the topic itself asks a question, taking a neutral stand will make the essay aimless. When the topic concerns morals/ethics/virtues etc., do not stand for wrong morals or ethics under any circumstances, even in a humorous way. You can always explain why people at times are forced to do wrong things and you can give suggestions to rectify the problem, but do not support their action. For example: Text on screen with voice over Topic - Increased cases of robbery in India. (Introduction can consist of A newspaper clipping relevant to the topic, to be scanned and inserted.)Then the body can be easily connected to the Introduction. 3
  4. 4. PES/ENG/IX/021 Body- Such people do not have money or shelter to support their families. Problem of unemployment adds to their miseries. This drives them to steal in order to support their livelihood. But, stealing has never been the correct thing to do. We cannot be happy knowing that we have deprived somebody else and stolen their hard-earned money. Opportunities provided by the government can generate some jobs, helping them to improve the standard of living. Some organizations, engaged in Social services, can also play an important role in spreading literacy, and giving them the zest to lead a healthy life. CUT TO ANCHOR: Thus, we can discuss an issue without justifying wrong actions. The last part of an essay is the conclusion. If the last bite is bitter, the whole lunch leaves a bitter taste in the mouth. Despite writing an attractive introduction and a detailed body, if the conclusion to our essay is not good, the essay fails to create an impact. Cut to MM: Shyam: What do you want to say in your conclusion Kushal? Kushal: The main aim of my writing this essay is to motivate the people to protest against the cutting down of trees in our neighbourhood. So, I want that to be my conclusion. Shyam: Should we then conclude saying, “Please join hands to save our trees”? Kushal: That’s too sweet. I am not asking for a favour. It is their neighbourhood too. Shyam: I didn’t realize that. Maybe that’s what we should tell the people too. It is their neighbourhood. They must fight for it. CUT TO ANCHOR: f;ZN/ tiA' i'' ;zd/F n;h d/Dk ukjz[d/ jkA T[;dk nzs th i'odko sohe/ Bkb j'Dk ukjhdk j?.T[; s'A gfjbkA fe s[jkBz{ ;jh f;fNnkA pko/ df;nk ikt/ , let us quickly sum up the main points of a conclusion, in an interesting way: Concise Opinion, Narrated Clearly, Leading to a Unified and focussed Summary which is Individual in nature, Original in content and Nature. Examples of some conclusions are: Text on screen with voice over 4
  5. 5. PES/ENG/IX/021 EXAMPLES OF CONCLUSIONS 1) Ending with an appeal(wherever possible) CUT TO ANCHOR: fJj fBpzX nkw iBsk d/ ezwkA,coikA,;wf;nktkA Bkb ;zpzfXs jB.id'A n;h fe;h rb pko/ nktki T[mkT[Ad/ jkA skA ;kBz{ fJj gsk j'Dk ukjhdk j? fe n;h ;jh ftF/ s / nktki T[mk oj/ jkA.fJ;bJh fJj fttkdkA s'A ofjs j'D / ukjhd / jB.fJE / ;kBz{ nkgDh rZb Bz{ fJzM jh Bjh efj d/Dk pbfe T[;s/ gfenkA ofjDk j? Text on screen with voice over Let us see some examples of some ‘conclusions’, with a universal appeal. Topic - Pollution Conclusion - a. So friends, let us take a pledge to make this world cleaner and greener. b. So finally, I don’t claim myself to be an environmentalist, but surely, I’m an Earth warrior! c . Ultimately, we must realize the value of saving our environment from pollution.” When we heal the Earth, remember we are healing ourselves.” d. While saving our environment from any pollution, “Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints, Kill nothing but time.” . CUT TO ANCHOR: fJe j'o sohek j?,gqFB d/ Bkb nzs eoB dk .go gqFB dh u'D ;jh j'Dh ukjhdh j? i' gqGktFkbh j't/ ns/ e[M ;zd/F d /t / s / Bkb jh gVQB tkb/ Bz{ ;'uD s/ wip{o eo d /t / . We can even add a remark after the question. For example: Text on screen with voice over 2) Ending with a question Text on screen with voice over Topic - Voting sensibly. Some examples of conclusions ending with a question Conclusion - a. The citizens of India should take interest in the affairs of the country and make full use of their powers to vote. Will India flourish or perish? The answer lies with you. 5
  6. 6. PES/ENG/IX/021 b. We, as Indian citizens, should be well aware of the party’s performance. So we must cast our vote to bring in a proper government. Isn’t that true? c. So decide for yourself, will you vote for Power or Performance or religion? The country is waiting for your decision. CUT TO ANCHOR: In essays concerning morals/ethics/virtues, we cannot give a message and asking a question is not advisable. Many times the question may not even help our cause. In such essays it is best to end with a remark. For example Text on screen with voice over 3) Ending with a remark Text on screen with voice over Some examples r given below: Topic - Honesty is the best policy Conclusion - Leading an honest life is the most straight forward, tension free and ethically correct way of living. While one lie leads to another, leading to a never ending sequel, what has one got to lose by telling the truth? After all honesty is the best policy. Topic- Where there is a Will, there is a way. Conclusion- Negative thoughts are always barriers to any success. Positive thinking leads one to self-motivation and a will to achieve the focussed goal in life. So, it is rightly said,’Where there is a will, there is a Way’. Topic- Slow and steady wins the race. Conclusion We may finally conclude that going fast with lots of mistakes is not at all desirable. It’s always better to be a little slow but steady and correct in your work. Maintaining a steady and positive growth is always better than a faulty, and unfocussed growth. Remember, ’Slow and steady wins the race’ CUT TO ANCHOR: A note: Children, the above examples of conclusion use the titles of the essays as their concluding remark. This is a very effective way of emphasizing the topics and reminding the readers about the aim of the essays, respectively. 6
  7. 7. PES/ENG/IX/021 Cut to MM: Kushal: So, we finally have our essay ready. Do you think people will be influenced by it? Shyam: Lets read it and see if we get inspired. CUT TO ANCHOR: After we have written the essay, we must read it again and see if it has come out the way we wanted it to. We should re-read and check for: Text on screen with voice over • Spelling mistakes • Continuity • Mood • Proper Punctuation. Change the sentences which you feel are going against the mood of the essay. Let us see how Kushal’s essay looks. Text on screen with voice over(Blurred Image of a tall tree to be put behind the text of the essay, as shown , previously.) SAVE OUR TREES Did you know trees have life too? Every time you pluck a leaf or crumple a plant under your foot, you cause them pain. The industrial wastes are poisonous for these plants. We leave no park, no garden litter free. We may not look after them, but do we have to stoop as low as heartlessly cutting them down? All that after trees doing so much for us? Trees provide us with fruits and vegetables. They provide us shade in summers. They are the home for many birds. Trees during photosynthesis, take in carbon- dioxide and give out oxygen. They help purify the air for us. Trees help in cooling the surroundings and in attracting rains. When we cut down trees, we not only make the land barren, but the atmosphere polluted and hotter too. If trees are indeed so helpful, why do people want to cut them? Positively for their own business. They build hotels, markets, malls etc. in places where trees have been standing for years. They build houses and use the wood from the trees to furnish them. They feel they are gaining a lot by cutting the trees while actually they are at a loss. When we cut trees, it is nobody’s but our own loss. The ecological balance gets affected. Food for the animals and humans reduce, pollution becomes dominant, rains become less frequent and weather becomes hot and dry. We can build the hotels somewhere else without cutting the trees. It is easy to cut down a tree in a day, but it is impossible to grow a tree in just a day. For all the good that trees do to us, we can at least show a little humanity by not plucking and crumpling plants unnecessarily. We should spread the awareness amongst more people. We have seen people coming and heartlessly cutting down 7
  8. 8. PES/ENG/IX/021 the trees we had fondly grown in our neighbourhood. The owner of the hotel built may enjoy his profits, but we will get hurt by the polluted air and increase in atmospheric temperature. Let us give ourselves cleaner air to breathe, fresher surroundings to live in and healthy gardens for the children to play in. Raise a voice. This is your neighbourhood, these are your trees. Save them. Can we give it an instant start? Cut to MM Kushal: We have written points to support us and have made people aware of the consequences. I think it should work. Shyam: More than reasons and points, an essay should be inspiring. Our essay effectively does that. Any person who reads it will think about saving the trees at least once. Kushal: Are all essays so effective? Shyam: The reason our essay came out well is because you believed in it. You wrote it with your heart and had a clear aim in your mind. Your efforts will definitely bear fruits. Shyam smiles. CUT TO ANCHOR: pZfuU fJ; fBpzX fbyD dh ez[ih okjh n;h s[jkBz{ fBpzX fbyDk Bjh pbfe uzrk fBpzX fet/A fbfynk ikAdk j? ,fJj f;ykfJnk j?.fJE/ i' T[dkjoDk fdshnkA rJhnkA jB T[j pj[s xZN jB.f;oiDkswe pDB dh e'fFF eo'.t/y' eh ;jh j?,iBsk ftZu fet/ ikro[esk nkJ/rh.feskpkA nkfd gVQB dh nkds gkU,nkb/- d[nkb / pko/ ikDekoh oy'.fby' Ujh i' s[;h ;'ud/ j',wfj;{; eod/ j' .fJj ;uw[u pj[s gqGktFkbh j't /rk. Text on screen with voice over Today, we have learnt  The body of descriptive essays usually consists of causes, effects and steps to be taken.  In some essays, we are required to agree or disagree with the topic.  We must never preach wrong morals or ideas in our essay.  The conclusion should carry the message and mood of the essay.  The essay may end with an appeal, a question or a remark.  Be creative and try something new to create an impact. Question – Answer session Work on writing the body of your essay ‘Books’ and suggest a suitable conclusion for it. Choose a topic of your choice from the following and write an essay on it.Hope you will enjoy your essay writing session. Thank you for being with us and taking so much interest!! Text on screen with voice over 8
  9. 9. PES/ENG/IX/021 1. Life in a city. 2. Importance of sports. 3. Are we forgetting Gandhi? 4. If I were an astronaut. 5. Where there is a will, there is a way. Hope you will enjoy your essay writing session. Thank you for being with us and taking so much interest!! End of the episode The script has been reviewed by - ------------------------------- Signature - ------------------------------------------------------------- Date - ------------------------------------------------------------------ 9

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