Use logical spatial ordering of details (Wyrick & Slaughter, p. 180).
Order your descriptions in the same way you might order a story – offer a logical ( logos ) order to the descriptions.
In the video about Katrina, how did Brian Williams order his descriptive account?
Use vivid and figurative language (Wyrick & Slaughter, p. 181).
This is where we show rather than tell and we become specific rather than general!
It was a cold night, so I turned on the heater. (This is an example of telling)
It was a cold night and it made me feel cold to my bones. While watching television with my husband, I went to snuggle in close to get warm, grabbing his hand in mine, but he pulled away from me, saying that my hands were frozen like ice. Although we were trying to reduce our electric bill, I got up and turned on the heater, I was tired of being an icicle that no one would hug!
In the video about Katrina, how did Brian Williams use language that showed instead of simply telling us facts?
Here is video description of the Good Shepherd Magdalen Laundry in Sunday’s Wall in Cork, Ireland.
Note: please write down how the images strike you ( pathos – emotions), what you feel when you see them (mood), and how you might verbally describe what you see in words.