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“The A g o o d w o r dhell hiso rpavedo o k b y P a t r i c k E . M c L e a n
     road to s ( r i g t d e r ) e - b with ...
Stephen King said:
“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
 And since he’s demonstrated
 a great deal of professional
 c...
(adverb)




What, exactly, does that mean?
(adverb)


What does that mean, exactly?
Exactly what does that mean?


(Is there no getting rid of it?)
ly
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                  An adverb is any
                  word that modifies a
                  verb. Adverbs,
       ...
When they’re good, they
                          are incredibly useful.
ADVERBS OF PLACE                                 ...
(large adverb)

                          When they’re good, they
                          are incredibly useful.
ADVERBS...
But they can quickly become the
             paving stones on the road to hell.
THE ALMOST UNIVERSALLY EVIL ADVERBS OF MAN...
(the bad kind of adverb)



             But they can quickly become the
             paving stones on the road to hell.
T...
willingly
                    maddeningly
                           sadly
                     obviously
                ...
hell is {   There is no word
            you can place
            between these
                                 } paved ...
The road to hell has been surfaced with
a mixture of roofing tar and recycled adverbs.
(long, imprecise verb)




The road to hell has been surfaced with
a mixture of roofing tar and recycled adverbs.



  (lon...
The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless
times with the finest mixture of roofing tar,
recycled adverbs and the toena...
The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless
          There is simply no limit to the
times with the finest mixture of ...
(adverb)


The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless
          There is simply no limit to the
times with the finest ...
s paved with good intentions.”
             Ironically, people turn to adverbs and
             adjectives when they want ...
(adverb)


                              (the damn things are everywhere.)




s paved with good intentions.”
            ...
A long time ago, before air quality sensors
and the the SPCA, miners used to carry
canaries into the mines with them when ...
A big part of the difference between being
a good writer and being a bad writer is the
attention you pay to adverbs.
1993 Bulwer-Lytton Contest (for worst fiction) winner
The camel died quite suddenly on the second day,
and Selena fretted s...
There are a lot of problems with that piece of writing.
After all, it’s not just bad, it’s award-winningly bad,
but upon c...
There are a lot of problems with that piece of writing.
After all, it’s not just bad, it’s award-winningly bad,
but upon c...
(adverbial clause)
                                                                      (adverb)


 The camel died quite ...
If you cross out all the adverbs and clean it up...
The camel died on the second day. “Delightful,”
thought Selena, “another holiday with Basil.”
The camel died on the second day. “Delightful,”
thought Selena, “another holiday with Basil.”


The camel died quite sudde...
What the does that even mean?
The camel died quite suddenly on the second day,
and Selena fretted sulkily and, buffing her ...
Most of the time, when we use an adverb of manner
it’s because we’ve chosen the wrong verb. If you use
the right verb, you...
Ran Quickly – Sprinted
          Ran Away – Fled
     Ran Slowly – Walked
Ran Awkwardly – Stumbled
Said quietly – Whispered
     Said loudly – Yelled
Said huskily – Breathed
    Said dryly – Rasped
Really Liked – Loved
Really Liked – Admired
 Really Liked – Adored
 Really Liked – Lusted
Laughed Madly – Cackled
          Played Loudly – Blared
Thought Intensely – Concentrated
       Breathed Deeply – Sighed
But you don’t really need to remember a lot of grammar
concerning adverbs. There is one simple rule that covers
the use of...
Omit Needless Words
Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a
paragraph no unnecessar...
About the Author
Patrick E. McLean is writer, writing coach and consultant who
blogs at goodwordsrightorder.com. You can a...
(Hopefully, after reading this book, you
                                         know why this adverb should die.)




Ab...
(And this one.)




                                       (Hopefully, after reading this book, you
                      ...
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Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license.
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Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license.




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  1. 1. “The A g o o d w o r dhell hiso rpavedo o k b y P a t r i c k E . M c L e a n road to s ( r i g t d e r ) e - b with adverbs.”
  2. 2. Stephen King said: “The road to hell is paved with adverbs.” And since he’s demonstrated a great deal of professional competence with both words and hellish things, I’m inclined to agree with his opinion, but...
  3. 3. (adverb) What, exactly, does that mean?
  4. 4. (adverb) What does that mean, exactly?
  5. 5. Exactly what does that mean? (Is there no getting rid of it?)
  6. 6. ly 115 An adverb is any word that modifies a verb. Adverbs, especially the paving- stone-on-the-road- to-hell kind, make a habit of ending in ‘-ly.’ adverbium
  7. 7. When they’re good, they are incredibly useful. ADVERBS OF PLACE ADVERBS OF DEGREE Words that explain where something happens. “He To what extent does something happen? almost, also, carried the ball inside.” Adverbs of place include: here, only, very, enough, rather, too. there inside, outside, everywhere, north ADVERBS OF TIME ADVERBS OF QUESTION Words that explain when something happens. “We went Words that explain the nature of a question. “How is this to breakfast after the show.” Adverbs of Time include: helping?” how, why, when, where, who, what. after, before, since, already, soon, then, now. ADVERBS OF NUMBER ADVERBS OF AFFIRMATION OR DENIAL Words that explain how often something happens. They “Yes, this page is getting a little dull.” yes, no, not, include: always, never, seldom, frequently, once, twice, certainly, maybe, probably, perhaps. often.
  8. 8. (large adverb) When they’re good, they are incredibly useful. ADVERBS OF PLACE ADVERBS OF DEGREE Words that explain where something happens. “He To what extent does something happen? almost, also, carried the ball inside.” Adverbs of place include: here, only, very, enough, rather, too. there inside, outside, everywhere, north ADVERBS OF TIME ADVERBS OF QUESTION Words that explain when something happens. “We went Words that explain the nature of a question. “How is this to breakfast after the show.” Adverbs of Time include: helping?” how, why, when, where, who, what. after, before, since, already, soon, then, now. ADVERBS OF NUMBER ADVERBS OF AFFIRMATION OR DENIAL Words that explain how often something happens. They “Yes, this page is getting a little dull.” yes, no, not, include: always, never, seldom, frequently, once, twice, certainly, maybe, probably, perhaps. often.
  9. 9. But they can quickly become the paving stones on the road to hell. THE ALMOST UNIVERSALLY EVIL ADVERBS OF MANNER Words that explain how something happens. “He quickly ran inside.” Adverbs of manner are the ones that end in ‘-ly.’ While it’s almost always better to do without an adverb if you can, adverbs of manner are almost universally bad.
  10. 10. (the bad kind of adverb) But they can quickly become the paving stones on the road to hell. THE ALMOST UNIVERSALLY EVIL ADVERBS OF MANNER Words that explain how something happens. “He quickly ran inside.” Adverbs of manner are the ones that end in ‘-ly.’ While it’s almost always better to do without an adverb if you can, adverbs of manner are almost universally bad. (adverb) (adverb)
  11. 11. willingly maddeningly sadly obviously ironically predictably laughably “The road to hell is { clearly } paved with adverbs.” irritatingly unexpectedly left-handedly moronically quickly sloppily
  12. 12. hell is { There is no word you can place between these } paved wi brackets that will not weaken the sentence. In fact, it’s hard to see how the addition of any word would help this sentence do its work.
  13. 13. The road to hell has been surfaced with a mixture of roofing tar and recycled adverbs.
  14. 14. (long, imprecise verb) The road to hell has been surfaced with a mixture of roofing tar and recycled adverbs. (long, nasty adverbial clause)
  15. 15. The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless times with the finest mixture of roofing tar, recycled adverbs and the toenail clippings of famous grammarians who are now deceased.
  16. 16. The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless There is simply no limit to the times with the finest mixture of roofing tar, number of words you can cram recycled adverbs and the toenail clippings of into a defenseless sentence. famous grammarians who are now deceased.
  17. 17. (adverb) The road to hell has been re-surfaced countless There is simply no limit to the times with the finest mixture of roofing tar, number of words you can cram recycled adverbs and the toenail clippings of into a defenseless sentence. famous grammarians who are now deceased.
  18. 18. s paved with good intentions.” Ironically, people turn to adverbs and adjectives when they want to add emphasis. But they actually make it harder for them to stress their point, because the adverbs make their writing harder to comprehend.
  19. 19. (adverb) (the damn things are everywhere.) s paved with good intentions.” Ironically, people turn to adverbs and adjectives when they want to add emphasis. But they actually make it harder for them to stress their point, because the adverbs make their writing harder to comprehend.
  20. 20. A long time ago, before air quality sensors and the the SPCA, miners used to carry canaries into the mines with them when they worked. As it happens, canaries are very sensitive to poisonous gases. So if the canary died, the passing of the unfortunate bird served as a warning that the air might be bad. Now I’m not saying that every time you use a word ending in ‘-ly’ that God kills a canary. (That’s what I believe, but it’s not polite to talk about religion.) I’m suggesting that when you come across an adverb, you could think to yourself, “Hunh, look at that. It’s a dead canary. Maybe I should check the quality of the writing around here.”
  21. 21. A big part of the difference between being a good writer and being a bad writer is the attention you pay to adverbs.
  22. 22. 1993 Bulwer-Lytton Contest (for worst fiction) winner The camel died quite suddenly on the second day, and Selena fretted sulkily and, buffing her already impeccable nails – not for the first time since the journey began – pondered snidely if this would dissolve into a vignette of minor inconveniences like all the other holidays spent with Basil.
  23. 23. There are a lot of problems with that piece of writing. After all, it’s not just bad, it’s award-winningly bad, but upon closer inspection...
  24. 24. There are a lot of problems with that piece of writing. After all, it’s not just bad, it’s award-winningly bad, but upon closer inspection... (A somewhat humorous, hyphenated adverb)
  25. 25. (adverbial clause) (adverb) The camel died quite suddenly on the second day, and Selena fretted sulkily and, buffing her already impeccable nails – not for the first time since the journey began – pondered snidely if this would dissolve into a vignette of minor inconveniences like all the other holidays spent with Basil. (adjectival bit) (adverb) (prepositional phrase in an adjective’s clothing)
  26. 26. If you cross out all the adverbs and clean it up...
  27. 27. The camel died on the second day. “Delightful,” thought Selena, “another holiday with Basil.”
  28. 28. The camel died on the second day. “Delightful,” thought Selena, “another holiday with Basil.” The camel died quite suddenly on the second day, and Selena fretted sulkily and, buffing her already impeccable nails – not for the first time since the journey began – pondered snidely if this would dissolve into a vignette of minor inconveniences like all the other holidays spent with Basil.
  29. 29. What the does that even mean? The camel died quite suddenly on the second day, and Selena fretted sulkily and, buffing her already impeccable nails – not for the first time since the journey began – pondered snidely if this would dissolve into a vignette of minor inconveniences like all the other holidays spent with Basil.
  30. 30. Most of the time, when we use an adverb of manner it’s because we’ve chosen the wrong verb. If you use the right verb, you don’t need to use any of those nasty little words that end in ‘-ly.’
  31. 31. Ran Quickly – Sprinted Ran Away – Fled Ran Slowly – Walked Ran Awkwardly – Stumbled
  32. 32. Said quietly – Whispered Said loudly – Yelled Said huskily – Breathed Said dryly – Rasped
  33. 33. Really Liked – Loved Really Liked – Admired Really Liked – Adored Really Liked – Lusted
  34. 34. Laughed Madly – Cackled Played Loudly – Blared Thought Intensely – Concentrated Breathed Deeply – Sighed
  35. 35. But you don’t really need to remember a lot of grammar concerning adverbs. There is one simple rule that covers the use of adverbs, as well all other kinds of words.
  36. 36. Omit Needless Words Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts. This requires not that the writer make all his sentences short, or that he avoid all detail and treat his subjects only in outline, but that every word tell. William Strunk from “The Elements of Style”
  37. 37. About the Author Patrick E. McLean is writer, writing coach and consultant who blogs at goodwordsrightorder.com. You can absolutely hire him to help you or your organization with your words. He loves feedback and hates writing about himself in the third person.
  38. 38. (Hopefully, after reading this book, you know why this adverb should die.) About the Author Patrick E. McLean is writer, writing coach and consultant who blogs at goodwordsrightorder.com. You can absolutely hire him to help you or your organization with your words. He loves feedback and hates writing about himself in the third person.
  39. 39. (And this one.) (Hopefully, after reading this book, you know why this adverb should die.) About the Author Patrick E. McLean is writer, writing coach and consultant who blogs at goodwordsrightorder.com. You can absolutely hire him to help you or your organization with your words. He loves feedback and hates writing about himself in the third person.
  40. 40. This work is made available under a Creative Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license.
  41. 41. This work is made available under a Creative Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license. (Go ahead, send it to everybody you know.)
  42. 42. (Wouldn’t this be better if it was ‘provided’ instead of made available?) This work is made available under a Creative Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license. (Go ahead, send it to everybody you know.)
  43. 43. This work is made available under a Creative Commons 3.0 Share-Alike Attribution license.
  44. 44. This work is made available under a Creative (No really, it’s3.0 Share-Alikesomething else.) Commons over. Go read Attribution license.
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