Making Revisions<br />Turning a good essay into a great essay<br />
Start BIG<br />Before you begin the nitpicky task of fixing your essay on the sentence level, look at the bigger picture<b...
Some questions to ask<br />Does your paper stay on point?<br />Is your writing clear and concise?<br />Will your audience ...
Go small<br />	Now look at the smaller details<br />Do the sentences flow?<br />Is the diction succinct enough?<br />Is th...
Rules for Good Sentences<br />Eliminate wordiness<br />Not good: The dinosaur took large strides very quickly when the clo...
Good Sentences (cont)<br />Put your most important ideas at the end of your sentence, as well as the information you inten...
Now You Try<br />Use the guidelines in this presentation to revise your virtual communities essay.<br />
A Model<br />A model rough draft is available here:<br />http://www.slideshare.net/MorningMaestro/joshua-brewer-virtual-co...
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Joshua Brewer - Lesson on Revising Papers - Final Draft

  1. 1. Making Revisions<br />Turning a good essay into a great essay<br />
  2. 2. Start BIG<br />Before you begin the nitpicky task of fixing your essay on the sentence level, look at the bigger picture<br />Make sure all aspects of the prompt are covered<br />Delete unnecessary sections of the essay<br />Explainanyconfusing ideas and strange concepts<br />Add new, necessary ideas throughout the essay<br />
  3. 3. Some questions to ask<br />Does your paper stay on point?<br />Is your writing clear and concise?<br />Will your audience be able to understand any new ideas that you presented?<br />Did you analyze the results in relation to your hypothesis?<br />Did you define all necessary terms?<br />Do you want to alter your hypothesis?<br />
  4. 4. Go small<br /> Now look at the smaller details<br />Do the sentences flow?<br />Is the diction succinct enough?<br />Is the syntax distracting the reader from the topic of the paper?<br />
  5. 5. Rules for Good Sentences<br />Eliminate wordiness<br />Not good: The dinosaur took large strides very quickly when the clouds started to drop water.<br />Good: The dinosaur ran from the rain.<br />To express actions and conditions, use specific verbs, adverbs, or adjectives rather than abstract nouns<br />Not good: The dinosaur made an escape when the rain came.<br />Good: The dinosaur escaped the rain.<br />When it is appropriate, make the subjects of your verbs the agents of the action the verb describes<br />Not good: The rain was avoided by the dinosaur<br />Good: The dinosaur avoided the rain.<br />Use the beginnings of your sentences to refer to (a) what you’ve already mentioned or (b) knowledge that you can assume you and your reader readily share<br />Not good: The meteor was what wiped out the dinosaurs. The dinosaurs never saw it coming.<br />Good: The dinosaurs never saw the meteor coming. The meteor wiped them all out.<br />
  6. 6. Good Sentences (cont)<br />Put your most important ideas at the end of your sentence, as well as the information you intend to develop in the next sentence<br />Not good: Some scientists would say meteors made the dinosaurs go extinct, but scientists have been debating the extinction of dinosaurs for decades. <br />Good: For decades scientists have tried to figure out what made the dinosaurs go extinct. Some say it was caused by a meteor crash.<br />Don’t write all short or all long sentences. Vary them<br />If your sentences are feeling tangled, observe this rule: the greater the logical complexity of the thought is, the simpler the syntax of the sentences expressing it ought to be<br />
  7. 7. Now You Try<br />Use the guidelines in this presentation to revise your virtual communities essay.<br />
  8. 8. A Model<br />A model rough draft is available here:<br />http://www.slideshare.net/MorningMaestro/joshua-brewer-virtual-communities-essay-rough-draft<br />A copy of the final, revised edition for the rough draft can be found here:<br />http://www.slideshare.net/MorningMaestro/joshua-brewer-virtual-communities-essay-final-draft<br />

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