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How are you informing Personal Recount – How did and entertaining your you feel about something? readers? Recount What kind of Factual Recount – recount is What can you tell us this? Is there enough about a trip or information so that experience you had? Imaginative the reader doesn’t e.g. High ropes trip Recount – You can have to guess what’s make your story up going on? Do you need AND include real to use ALL these events. words? Have you got anWho, what , when, where, why, how. interesting introduction? Are you too specific? Could you The sun’s rays beamed through the cars leave some bug-splattered windscreen, making it information out? hard to spot Auckland airport from the back seat. I was sure glad to be rid of my Yesterday morning I got out of bed, walked down annoying sister for two weeks. These the corridor, put some toothpaste on my toothbrush, and brushed my teeth. I put it back on the sink. school holidays at my Aunty Muriel’s Then we travelled to Morere. place is going to be the bomb!
What ideas have you First Person – ‘I’ put in your story? So I followed my nose to the delicious smell, and I saw it!You could think into the What’s your Second Person – ‘You’future. point of view First, you need to for your make sure you have story? your bags. Then… How have you summed up Third person – ‘He or She’ your story? He was amazed at the dinosaur (A conclusion) museum. He decided to go again.I had so much fun on the How would youhigh ropes. I wonder what introduce yourour class will get up to characters?next term? Yet another excruciatingly long school holiday trip in the family car, heading to Auckland with my rather annoying brother, Eric, who has a tendency to drop his chewing gum in my hair when he falls asleep. Mum and Dad are fine, but it’s a pinching war on the back seat! Who, what , when, where, why, how.
Organised, sequenced Basic connectives: because, so events. that, so I, to, later, then. Better connectives – Have you used such as, as a result, connectives so beforehand, In what order you can explain have you written furthermore. your events? your story? Have you tried to paragraph yourI bought an ice-cream work?then I walked to the The Basic Rule: Keep oneshop. I said hello to idea to one paragraph.the shop-keeper and Below has been indented.hooray to my mum. The chicken wire was the I think the order of worst of all. There was nothing to events got a little hold on to except the rope that mixed up here. kept us safe. Some of our classmates were pretty scared. II shouted out to mum so she knew I tried to get through it as fast aswas off to the shop. “Hello,” I said I could.to the shop-keeper. I really felt like (You can miss a line)a chocolate ice-cream, so I bought Next stop, sandwich city!one! I was sooo hungry! I …
Parts of the Check out the LR English language. example pages for more help on these. Adverbs: usually Have you used verbs, come immediately Have you used adverbs and before or after prepositions? adjectives?Verbs – ‘doing’ words, like jump, paint, verbs andclimb, skate, walk. adjectives. The In, by, on, above, beside,Adjectives – ‘describing’ words, like tell you how under, down…pretty, shiny, wet, slippery, scary something was done. Have you used vocabulary related You should be specific He quickly walked to what you’re with people, places writing about? home. and events. High ropes – belaying, clips, wire,He went on an inflatable tyre with caterpillar, rickety bridge,and engine and got wet at a cool descend, safety helmet…place. Are your verbs in Yikes! Talk about NOT past tense? specific! See how we’ve made this next part more specific. Buy – bought, run – ran, hide – hid,Raymond went on a bumper boat eat – ate, fling – flung.and got wet at Splash Planet.
Talking properly. Are you using your prepositions correctly? Is your writing easy or Correct: Cut it into small pieces. difficult to Incorrect: Cut it up into small pieces. understand?I dided the walked to the shop to Are your subjects and verbsgets an bread. correct? Check the LR example pages for help.I walked to the shop to buy thebread. SINGULAR PLURAL The bird DOES migrate – The birds DO migrate.Do you got some money? The child sings - The children singHave you got some money? Present Tense – using words that tell us something is happening now. Is your tense consistent? I am buying the bread. Past Tense – using words that tell us something has already Future Tense – using words that happened. tell us something will happen. I bought the bread. I will buy the bread.
Full stops etc. What punctuation could you use? You should be putting full stops at the end of your sentences…Our class went to the communitycentre to brave the high ropes and () parenthesesthen - …otherwise the reader . will get tired trying to read your looooong dash sentences.we were broken up into groups but Full stopI was the only boy in my group andI had to go first on the practiceropes as well as on the real ones itwas a little scary some peopleweren’t scared and liked it I was alittle scared at the top of the roof WHERE ARE THE FULL STOPS!!!
What do we do If the teacher or in our class? friend is available… If you are not sure how to spell a word, Show them your attempt. They may be UNDERLINE it. able to show you another way of spellingI climed the tree, once I saw the those sounds you were not sure of.inamees coming. “Thruw – thr is correct, now the oo sound looks like this – ough. It also has You should use a some other sounds as well. So now you spell-write to try can use these letters if you come across and find simple a word that has an ‘oo’ sound.” words. Make sure you put it onto a new words Or a dictionary chart in your homework book to practice for slightly harder until you know it. words. You can then show your parents how your spelling is coming Make sure you have along! tried to spell the word first.